just wow

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It's only a play room
Safe in my home
It's only a play room
Safe in my home
Got no tears, no fears
No other place to roam
'Cause Papa wants me always
To stay at home
Safe in my play room
Safe in my home
-V.C. Andrews' "My Sweet Audrina"

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Nice work my friend!

I really wish you had submitted a higher res though cause all the strain on my eyes gave me a headache by the time I was done reading it. I'm not sure it fully sank in lol. But it sounded to be full of agonizing questions that we often find ourselves asking when relationships turn sour. Very poignantly put.

I really enjoy the image, and how you centered the text below the focal point of light; it works very well here. The gloominess of the image also helps to augment the mood of the piece as a whole. The font is great; however it is hard to read at this res, but I’ve already stated that.

Overall I’ll give this a even with the small res.

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Your getting old that's why it's hard to read j/k. I will make it bigger when I get a chance hopefully don't have to re-submit the whole thing... Thanks for the profound comment . Yeah your right I will make it bigger hehe. Thanks for the fav. as well . -Just my thoughts take them as such.-.

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That's better!

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Thank you -Just my thoughts take them as such-.

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Holy shit man, i dunno why but i suddenly got the urge to kill someone

the image reflect the poem so perfectly, a thunderstorm coming closer... and closer and then bam one for the favs indeed.

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Clatto Verata N... Necktie... Neckturn... Nickel... It's an "N" word, it's definitely an "N" word! Clatto... Verata... N--- *cough* Okay... that's it!

nicely put together word and rhythm wise. and great with the image. i at first thought 'why did my sun go?' was typed wrong and should have been 'where did my sun go?' but i suppose both work. nicely done!

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Yeah I kept going back and forth between those two and just stuck with the current one of 'where did my sun go?' Yet I see so many areas I could have done differently and have a different effect but that's with any work I guess you can't ever have it perfect to your liking. Thanks . -Just my thoughts take them as such.-

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